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Cmdr Raptor
post Jun 23 2004, 06:38 AM
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I've made a new one. Cleaner and more informative.

And hopefully it will be updated more often too. original.gif

http://web.hibo.no/~werner/ultimatecorp


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Peace is a lie, there is only passion.
Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Chico
post Jun 23 2004, 09:03 PM
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It also insults me on there, so theres something for everybody tongue.gif
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Game Keeper
post Jun 24 2004, 08:27 AM
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On your site "But with a rooster that's almost never full" is your subconcious talking about your life, or did you mean "But with a roster that's almost never full"

Also, it's "truly" not "truely"


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NoWearMan
post Jun 24 2004, 09:53 AM
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GRAMMAR LAWYERS ARE SO COOL
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jonoboiiy
post Jun 25 2004, 02:11 AM
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QUOTE (Game Keeper @ Jun 24 2004, 12:27 AM)
On your site "But with a rooster that's almost never full" is your subconcious talking about your life, or did you mean "But with a roster that's almost never full"

Also, it's "truly" not "truely"

If we are getting technical, there should have been a question mark after that first sentence.

Secondly, the entire structure of the first sentence is completely out of whack. Without commas before and after the "rooster" quotation, the reader is forced to reread the sentence over, trying to find the pauses that would allow the thought process to flow in a coherent manner. As it stands, that line of syntax is a complete disaster.

Furthermore, the last sentence of your post is lacking a period at the end of it. While it does make use of an effective comma, the line fails regardless as it leaves the reader wondering whether the sentence is complete or not. A simple period at the end would have solved that problem. (It is also required out of necessity to end sentences with some form of punctuation. Preferably it would be the correct, corresponding punctionation. That may be shocking, but it is true.)

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Doom Marine
post Jun 25 2004, 04:10 AM
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ahh jono you gave me a good laugh there


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Cmdr Raptor
post Jun 25 2004, 04:36 AM
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GK, joke or not, english is not my mother tongue. So until you can write/talk/read norwegian at the same level I can english, I will -maybe- listen to you. Until then, så kan du holde kjeften din.


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Through passion, I gain strength.
Through strength, I gain power.
Through power, I gain victory.
Through victory, my chains are broken.
The Force shall free me.
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Chico
post Jun 25 2004, 06:04 AM
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QUOTE (Cmdr Raptor @ Jun 24 2004, 09:36 PM)
så kan du holde kjeften din.

Ohh that was harse.. leave GK's cross dressing out of this tongue.gif
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